Prompt:Today we practiced exploding the moment. For today's blog I want you to pick one sentence from your personal narrative and explode the moment. Remember to use descriptive details; bring the moment alive for the reader.
Orginal Sentence: Over the next couple of days, we went to the range and made sure everything was fine with the equipment, practiced, and then we came back to the resort and spent the rest of the day just hanging around, napping, and swimming.
Revised: For the next two days, we would go to the range in the morning to check on our equipment and to get some good practice time in. I had heard so many horror stories of international travel and equipment issues. A girl from the United States team actually had to go for three days without her own equipment and without her own clothes. I was really excited that none of my things had been lost or damaged en route to the tournament. After we did everything that had to be done for the day at they range, the team would go back to the resort and disburse into our own little social groups for the afternoon. We ate lunch and then would go swimming, tanning, napping, or just spend time in each others rooms talking and enjoying ourselves.
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